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Someone believes that modern telecommunication devices have many benefits to human, while others think otherwise. What is your opinion? Please discuss and use examples to support your own ideas.

Over the past several years,
telecommunication
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 appliances have been steadily spreading.
While
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 some may feel that
this
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 phenomenon may have adverse effects, I would argue that its benefits are far greater than any possible concerns.
To begin
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 with, telecommunications gadgets have allowed many multinational corporations to thrive.
This
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 is mainly because these entities usually communicate with their international branches utilizing
telecommunication
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 devices
such
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 as laptops; daily tasks
such
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 as sending
a
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apply
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mail or receiving a paycheck
is
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are
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 carried out instantly.
For instance
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, Merck, A multinational pharmaceutical company, gives portable computers to its employees all over the
world
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 to send queries and receive job duties rapidly.
In addition
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 to
this
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, current
telecommunication
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 appliances are connecting many families.
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, immigrants usually communicate with their families using Skype, an application for video calls, which is conducted on a smart device.
This
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 makes the
world
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 an accessible place and helps relatives who
destined
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are destined
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 to be apart to interact with each
others
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other
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.
In contrast
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, if
human
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humans
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did
Verb problem
had
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 not
invent
Wrong verb form
invented
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such
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telecommunication
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 devices, they would be still living in a
stone age-like
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Stone Age-like
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world
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. In conclusion,
although
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 some people may perceive the existing
telecommunication
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 device As an issue, I am
off
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of
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 the opinion that these gadgets are beneficial for the human race because they not only help businesses to save time and effort, but they
also
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 make the
world
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 a smaller place.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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