Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social,and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?*

In
modern world
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the modern world
, it is true that young ones are facing more hardships from all the directions of the society like school, sports, family and many more as compared to the earlier decades.
This
essay will discuss the reasons and possible solution for
this
problem in
further
paragraphs.
To begin
, the very
first
reason is
increase
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increasing
in competition. Nowadays, Overall expectation level of parents from children are very high like youngsters should achieve high scores in studies, behave like an ideal child in front of others, get
high paid job
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a high paid job
. These ideal factors are increasing stress among the
adolscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
adolescent
and destroying their sense of self. The other reason is
infulence
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the influence
influence
, One common problem among the youngsters is that they get easily influenced
with
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by
the friends who can afford to spend
lot
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lots
of money
in
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on
trivial things like mobile phones, clothes and accessories and to achieve all
this children
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these children
this child
often feel
lot
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a lot
of pressures which results in developing anxiety issues at
very young age
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a very young age
. There are many possible solutions to address
this
issue and one of them is, Parents, teachers, mentors should motivate the children to explore their area of interest and help them to identify the type of activities which provides pleasure and happiness.
This
can help the children to attain mental satisfaction and give them positive energy to compete in the real world situations. The other solution is, children should learn to handle the failures and the onus are
on
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for
parents to prepare them for every type of situation without feeling immense pressure.
However
, to achieve
this parents
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these parents
this parent
should create a friendly
environement
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
where children can talk to them without
hesitation so
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hesitation, so
, parents can share their experience and guide them in
intended direction
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the intended direction
an intended direction
. In a nutshell, young generation is the future for any
nation
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nation, therefore
therefore
, it is very important to take care of their mental health and help them to maintain the pressure in
this
competitive world. The increase in depression, anxiety issues and stress among the youths is not a good sign for any country
growth
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growth, therefore
therefore
,
this
issue is already grabbing
adults
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adult's
adults'
adult
attention in some countries and they have
also
started working to address
this
issue.
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