Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social,and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?*

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the modern world

, it is true that young ones are facing more hardships from all the directions of the society like school, sports, family and many more as compared to the earlier decades.

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problem in

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increasing

in competition. Nowadays, Overall expectation level of parents from children are very high like youngsters should achieve high scores in studies, behave like an ideal child in front of others, get

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a high paid job

. These ideal factors are increasing stress among the

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a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity

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adolescent

and destroying their sense of self. The other reason is

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the influence

influence

, One common problem among the youngsters is that they get easily influenced

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the friends who can afford to spend

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lots

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trivial things like mobile phones, clothes and accessories and to achieve all

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this children

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these children

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often feel

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a lot

of pressures which results in developing anxiety issues at

very young age

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a very young age

. There are many possible solutions to address

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issue and one of them is, Parents, teachers, mentors should motivate the children to explore their area of interest and help them to identify the type of activities which provides pleasure and happiness.

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can help the children to attain mental satisfaction and give them positive energy to compete in the real world situations. The other solution is, children should learn to handle the failures and the onus are

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parents to prepare them for every type of situation without feeling immense pressure.

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these parents

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should create a friendly

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where children can talk to them without

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hesitation, so

, parents can share their experience and guide them in

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the intended direction

an intended direction

. In a nutshell, young generation is the future for any

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nation, therefore

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, it is very important to take care of their mental health and help them to maintain the pressure in

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competitive world. The increase in depression, anxiety issues and stress among the youths is not a good sign for any country

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issue is already grabbing

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issue.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

359 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

academic pressure
globalized world
competitive education system
social media influences
cyberbullying
commercial pressures
aggressive marketing
materialistic desires
peer pressure
high expectations
standardized testing
quantifiable performance
stress and anxiety
extracurricular achievements

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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social,and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?*

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