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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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For
many many
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many, many
 years, the ways to know the fresh news were the television as well as the newspapers, but from the past until now these two have been losing the users that they had before. Due to the development of technology people have been changing their habits one of
them it´s
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them, it´s
 the surface of the new news being now
for example
 the smartphones, tablets, and computers. As I said before the causes of
this
 dramatic change were the development of modern technology
such
 as telephones, tablets, consoles, and laptops. That gave us one faster line of news more convenient ways to approach the different types of news. But the main cause, at my point of view, it was the changing of habits that people are developing we
humans we
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humans, we
 are trying to absolve habits to live a life more convenient more comfortable and faster. Seeing the news from Tv, newspapers, and magazines
is
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are
such
 an inappropriate to watch the news. Regarding solutions, I believe it´s pointless to talk about solutions because the are no advantages when it comes to watching the news by tv or magazines.
On the other hand
, There are a lot of advantages when it comes to observing the news by smartphones or
for example
 from computers.
First
 of all, you are able to go wherever you want to go with your laptop you can still do your job without caring about carrying your mobile phone with you thing that with your tv you would not be able to carry your Tv with you in your daily basis. Features like being smaller and thinner were the main reasons people change their ways to approach the fresh news. To sum up, I believe in order to people start watching
news
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the news
 by tv or magazines they would need a few reasons to do it reasons to stop using
smartphones
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smart phones
. From my
perspective I
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perspective, I
 don't think there is much to be gained in starting using again those old-fashioned devices.
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