Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Technological revolutions have changed the
way
, an individual conducts their life
. However
, some people
have the opinion that,
older innovation in technologies has greater benefits as compared to current development in it. I totally disagree with Remove the comma
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this
opinion and believe that,
it depends on the society's attitude, how they use Remove the comma
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this
invention of technology
for benefitting their life
.
In the 19th century, when the industrial revolution took place, the way
in which the people
managed their life
, had changed in a more positive way
. For instance
, changes took place in how people
use transportation by
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and airplanes
airplanes
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aeroplanes
also
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the level
a level
people
also
increased and they also
started to enjoy the changes in the world and people
used it in positive
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a positive
way
rather than negative way
and that is
the reason why people
consider the older technology
as much more advantageous. Therefore
, from these we can say that,
the technological invention of the past has a much more positive impact on the social Remove the comma
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life
of the society.
On the other hand
, in the recent past, there has been an internet revolution, which has made life
much simpler and easier. For example
, with the help of one click, we can do lots of things like controlling a plane, transaction
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the world
world wide web
, all the information is available on it and many more, but the problem is, Correct your spelling
World Wide Web
people
are using it in much negative way
, and that is
the real complication, not the technology
, they are using for creation of virus, nuclear and atomic bombs, hacking the bank accounts of peoples. Hence
, from these
we can say thatAdd a comma
these,
,
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creation
of recent Correct article usage
the creation
technology
is a boon, but it should be used with proper concise, for the harmony of the people
and not for the destruction of the people
's life
.
In conclusion, there is no issue in
the recent development of Change preposition
with
technology
as people
say that the technology
of the past was much better. These recent technology
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people
are using it
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them
purpose
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positive
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a positive
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