Today’s children meet academic, social and commercial pressures. What do you think are the causes and what solutions are possible?

Civilization has brought about scholastic,
interactional
and materialistic pressures that today’s children
undergo
Suggestion
will undergo
. As opposed to the seeds of the plight seeming quite evident, the resolutions are by no means going to be simple;
nevertheless
, they exist. Seeing a
child
heading to school with a bag almost twice as heavy as a
child
himself
objective male pronoun, used to refer to a male human or animal
he
is already oppressive.
This
is because parents have unrealistic expectations from their children. They want them to excel in every field,
thus
not letting them bring out their hidden talents and find their niche.
This
complication in itself gives rise to many other corollaries. The root of all of these mishaps is that today’s
child
competes
Suggestion
will compete
with a
child
not of his
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
, but of a ‘global village’.
This
means that globalization may be another cause of the predicament.
This
all becomes a setback in both physical and mental developments of a
child
. Not only do academic pressures come out of globalization, but social and commercial ones, too, stem from
this
. While parents goad their children into advocating their inherited rites and rituals, or customs, the entire world coerces them into assimilating into a globalized world;
hence
, a
child
is in a muddle over the mishap.
This
is likely to bring about a horrible scenario - a
child
chooses neither and prefers individuality,
therefore
becoming a person far from being a community one. As far as commercial tensions are concerned,
causes
Suggestion
the causes
are various. Some of them, in my personal view, are
globalization
Suggestion
globalizing
, up-to-date technology, and above all, peer pressure, which is positive if peers can differentiate vice and virtue, and rather negative if they cannot. Consider a
child
walking with his friends and see them use gadgets that his parents cannot afford to buy. Naturally, a
child
gets depressed. For the world has changed dramatically,
such
issues were not seen heretofore. More precisely, the solutions are not going to be easy-to-approach. Parents had better have realistic expectations
from
Suggestion
for
of
their children, and a
child
has to be handled with great care and love.
However
, the main onus is on teachers. A
child
has to learn not to compete, but to co-operate; more vitally, a
child
has to have no hurdle on his route to finding himself. Summing up, I reiterate my opinion that a
child
must be shielded from today’s pressures. Challenging though the solutions to the hitch are, they are realistic, at the very least.
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