Young people now spend far too much time and money on following fashion trends ( such as clothes and technology). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often seen that the images of the news stories are included in both television and newspapers while broadcasting them, yet some people believe that the impact of the pictures is more powerful than the details.
However
, in my opinion, people often judge the news by seeing pictures rather than paying attention to the details and
this
trend has more advantages than the drawbacks it offers. On the one hand, news with the images
often catch
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often catches
people`s attention towards the story line.
Firstly
,
pictures
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the pictures
are a vital for the reference of each new
stories
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story
and without that
people
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person
might not have an interest to bother themselves to read whole details.
Moreover
, adding picture not only attract users, but
also
give
lot
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a lot
of information which might not able to illustrate
by
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with
words.
For example
, it would be better attaching images to the newspapers for the information as today`s generation would not read the whole news rather they find articles with images on the Internet. In a result,
although
readers usually ignore the newspaper and prefer e-news, adding the
incidents images
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incidents, images
would change their mindsets towards the newspapers. On
other hand
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the other hand
, it is often observed
that images sometimes
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that sometimes images
are blur and readers could not view them clearly as they have some confidential details or
incidents
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incident's
incident
details.
In addition
, at the same time words are the major source of particular news and they describe full activities of the news with full details.
Nevertheless
, posting crime pictures and accidents picture
are
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is
preferable unless those are viewable by
public
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the public
and not harm any religion.
Besides
, some people intentionally read the whole news as it has images of a dead body and mesh. In conclusion, while sometime the images can describe
plethora
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a plethora
the plethora
of detail which may not be able to elaborate by word, at the same time, some people
also
prefer dig
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prefer to dig
into the details and pay more attention towards the words. Yours faithfully, John Soberman
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