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planting trees is very important for the environment .some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns while other believes housing facilities should be built instead do you agree or disagree?

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Planting trees
is very import
Suggestion
very import
 for
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. Some people say trees should be planted in vacant area of cities and towns while others believe housing facilities should be built
instead
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 For some areas
such
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 as villages trees are more important to them than housing, because majority live in huts and attached mud houses , housing is usually not their problems,
however
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 they need trees for making firewood's, trees are source of
food
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 for them in cities where farming is their major occupation
such
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 as planting of cassava for making cassava flour, coconut trees for making coconut oil and coconut fruits , tomatoes, pepper, even the palm kernel trees are used as sheds for building their huts and the palm kernel fruits for palm oil and it's
also
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 used for making local dishes in Nigeria. People in the rural areas will
prefare
like better; value more highly
prefer
prepare
 having trees than having houses Relatively people in the developing and urban cities usually prepare housing facilities because the city is developed and has little or no space for building houses and it's majorly a problem in cities where it's overpopulated and has no enough houses for the people living in the cities. In the urban areas there is usually deforestation and
this
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 has led to less accessibility to
food
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, which has made
food
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 expensive, when they have to buy
food
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 from rural areas to the cities,
secondly
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 the bush burning and deforestation has chased the animals away making it difficult and expensive to get
food
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 in the cities, respecting building houses becomes expensive as the timber's that should be used for constructions has been burnt along side bush burning . In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 agree trees should be planted in vacant places in the cities.
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