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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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The maps show the changes of the Stockeford Village from 1930 to 2010 Over the period, the village of Stockeford witnessed dramatic changes To be specific,
first
 of all, in the east of the north, farmland was destroyed to make way for houses. During 8 decades, primary school was slightly expanded.
Moreover
,
new road
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a new road
the new road
 was erected between rows of houses. In
northwest
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the northwest
, houses
was erected
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were erected
 on the original site of shops.
Post office
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The post office
 still stood as it did in 2010. A new road was
also
 created.
Secondly
, in the east of south, gardens and
large house
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large houses
a large house
 were destroyed and replaced by retirement house. The number of houses
become
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becomes
 bigger and expanded towards southern. Beside that, in the southwest, houses were constructed to replace farmland.
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