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Spending money on art is waste ,so invest on public sector, agree or disagree

#money #art #waste #sector
Art and
culture
 are heritage and assets of a nation which depicts the young generation the lifestyles, traditions, and historic moments of their elders through music,
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
theatres
, painting, and antiques.
However
, some people think that the government should use more money on the benevolence of civil services rather than on music and
theater
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
. On the one hand,
government
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the government
 is promoting exhibitions
on
Suggestion
of
 art and
culture
 on
large scale
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a large scale
 not only for fund-raising but
also
 to explore some new hidden talent in every area. These events help new artists showcase their works and provide a platform
to
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for
 people to visit events related to
culture
 and traditions. Artworks
offer
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offers
 a welcome break from the humdrum of monotonous life and daily routine
On the other hand
, some people oppose these
ideas they think that
Suggestion
ideas that they think
 government should give more importance to public issues and affairs rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 investing money in these unprofitable and worthless functions and gatherings.
However
, I do not believe these arguments stand up
in
Suggestion
to
 scrutiny. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that nothing is better than art and
culture
, which has potential to bring people together and strengthen social cohesion in society.
such
Suggestion
Such
 events motivate people towards art and
culture
.
Submitted by Sila Muntaha on

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