Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Participating in sports should be fun and rewarding for everyone. The sport persons are as famous as the other
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celebrities,
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, they gain payments
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fame status
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fame, status
and luxuries similar to them and spend extravagant lifestyle.
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other people argue about their salaries. No doubt
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Our sports heroes are true legend and the focus of
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the media
on their personalities,
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hard work
and skills proves that they deserve to be idealized by common people.
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talented and competent committee members, only a few
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a person trained to compete in sports
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reason, the super salaries of these athletes are more justifiable as
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compared
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especially when compare to other surgeons
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scientist and professors. Even though, it is fact that players with highly distinguishable qualities sacrifices their time
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relations even their own well-being not only for the money but
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reputation
and dignity of their country.In
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the heart of their followers. So it is concluded that players
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after their Powerful and die hard work, not only earn their desirable
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obtain gratitude and regard of their fans all over the world But it
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