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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Participating in sports should be fun and rewarding for everyone. The sport persons are as famous as the other
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TV
 celebrities,
hence
, they gain payments
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fame status
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fame, status
 and luxuries similar to them and spend extravagant lifestyle.
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While
 other people argue about their salaries. No doubt
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Our sports heroes are true legend and the focus of
media
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the media
 on their personalities,
hardwork
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hard work
 and skills proves that they deserve to be idealized by common people.
Furthermore
, after selection
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of
 talented and competent committee members, only a few
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numbers
 of
athelete
a person trained to compete in sports
athletes
 are selected with extraordinary and marvellous skills. Due to
this
 reason, the super salaries of these athletes are more justifiable as
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compared
 to the money of superstars.
On the contrary
, many people find their rewards unfair
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especially when compare to other surgeons
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scientist and professors. Even though, it is fact that players with highly distinguishable qualities sacrifices their time
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,
relations even their own well-being not only for the money but
also
 for the
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reputation
 and dignity of their country.In
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they
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at
in
 the heart of their followers. So it is concluded that players
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after their Powerful and die hard work, not only earn their desirable
money but
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money, but
also
 obtain gratitude and regard of their fans all over the world But it
also
 indicates that our society places more value on sports
then
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in
 other professions and achievements.
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