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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/ flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter explain the reasons for the noise apologise describe what action you will take

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Many
people
 believe that advertisements motivate the audience to buy the things which they really need not buy, but
other
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 opine the viewpoint that they provide information about the new entries in the market which can make our life more easy and comfortable. I partially support both opinions, that somehow it is beneficial and at the same time creates unnecessary demands among the viewers.
To begin
 with,
people
 think that the advertisement is the biggest scam
that is
 legal and approved by the government and the common
people
. By the use of many big celebrities, they influenced the choice of their followers and promote brands and increased sales figures. These influences create the fake demand for the product and tell benefits for using that.
Although
 they personally do not use those products. Which is somehow harmful to their followers and a clear breach of
the
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trust. For
an
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instant, in 2014 famous cricketer M.S. Dhoni endorsed the brand Amrapali
for
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to
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 buy
luxury
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a luxury
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 home their fans invested lots of amounts on that project and after 5 years no construction has been started and
money
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the money
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 of those fans has been stuck in that project. So, One should use their own mind rather than following the advert. On the flip side, It
also
 beneficial if used to provide correct information to viewers. It provides a wide knowledge of the products and the buyer has multiple choices for their need. Apart from
this
 is let us know about the ongoing offers and deals where one can get a smart discount on their purchase.
Such
 as The USA Black-Friday deals and Indias Diwali Deals where most of the company has come up with many offers for their customers. Apart from an individual, it has other benefits as well,
this
 is a vast industry that generates millions of jobs and many
people
 depend on it for their livelihoods. To sum up, with the given details it is crystal clear that the advertising industry has pros and cons and to understand that consumers have to be smart and active who can utilize the information for their profit not get trapped by the many celebrity faces.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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