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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreighn language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Migrating to another
countyland
Suggestion
county land
 can be tricky, if the intricacies are not
worked
Suggestion
working
 upon before hand. The world is dynamic and is changing
continously
at every point
continuously
.
Although
 with globalisation, it is
comparitively
in a relative manner; by comparison to something else
comparatively
 easier to be aware about peculiarities than
before but
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before, but
 still
one
 can never be sure of the being prepared for all challenges.
This
 essay shall discuss issues
one
 may face when away from homeland. Humans are a social being. Everyone wants to be accepted in their set of people.
However
, communication is the only way to connect and
pronounciation
the manner in which someone utters a word
pronunciation
 of native words can be difficult if
its
it is
it's
 our
second
 language, which can be a reason for
ostracisinsim
. The food joints and food choices may be odious.
Moreover
, there
are
Suggestion
is
whole lot
Suggestion
a whole lot
 of
practicle
concerned with actual use or practice
practical
practice
 side
to
Suggestion
of
 these issues as well.
Racisim
Suggestion
Racism
 is a fearful situation that
one
 can be
targetted
a reference point to shoot at
targeted
 to. The
managemnet
the act of managing something
management
 of finances and conversion of currency to
one
's own can be an issue with some.
One
 may miss the festive celebrations from
homeland
Suggestion
the homeland
 and the aura of family get
togethers
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
. In the end, I wish to conclude that
grass
Suggestion
the grass
 is greener on the other side. I agree with the notion that
its
it is
it's
 difficult to live in another country.
Furthermore there
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Furthermore, there
 might be knowledge and monetary improvements, but practically there are issues
one
 has to face to make your space and identity.
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