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Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them.

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We live in twenty
first
 century now, the era of technologies. Nowadays a big amount of different gadgets is present in any life. The computer, the most common of them, is a great part of our living. So, they are believed to be
help
Suggestion
a help
 for someone, but for others devices are seemed to be
hindrance
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a hindrance
. People see no life without them, because of their indispensability. Let`s take a look at
details
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the details
.
Firstly
, of these tools really can be taken advantage.
Moreover
, they give us an amazing opportunity to spend our time wisely and rationally,
also
 go around our business at ease. In any case, even the sun has spots. At present days, younger generation
use
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uses
 laptops or phones for wasting their beings pointlessly. Even though children don`t understand harmful effect,
older peer group
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the older peer group
an older peer group
often rise
Suggestion
often rises
 to the bait.
Secondly
, let`s examine why technologies couldn`t
been
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be
 lived without. It should be obvious that computers allow us not to have back to the wall in many ways. They are used for taking it easy and, of course, gadgets very comfortable in work. We need to appreciate them for lots of enjoyable features. Remind yourself about all the times you have not
work
Suggestion
worked
 like a dog, thanks to your laptop, or played in games to relax from
hard day
Suggestion
a hard day
. All in all, technologies are really may be called as a double-edge sword. Try to observe all the advantages and disadvantages to figure out what it is exactly.
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