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labor force employment in usa during 1930 and 2010

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The given line graph represents the percentage of the
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 force that was employed in different industries between 1930 and 2010. Overall, employment in fishing, farming and forestry decreased over the past eight decades, while jobs in
industry
 and technology increased gradually. Employment in sales
industry
 started increasing over the past five
deacdes
a period of 10 years
decades
. At the beginning of the period, farming, fishing and forestry
was
Suggestion
were
 about 70% of the US
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 force.
However
, by 2010
this
industry
 decreased dramatically by having the lowest rates of employment at under 5%.
In contrast
, those who were engaged in industrial professions increased from zero to amounting for the largest rate of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 employment at just under 40%. Jobs in
techincal
of or relating to technique or proficiency in a practical skill
technical
 and sales mirrored each other with both increasing steadily.
However
, by 1995 both started deviating from one another and by 2010 technical
industry
 leaded
second
 among all the given industries. Employment in Other services remained relatively stable.
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