Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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They kill their own classmate with gun and so many
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Many psychologists opine that the primary causative factor for
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they are wasting their time idly
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According to a recent survey done by child
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the virtual world can hinder the growth of expression of emotions and have reduced face to face communication
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friends, they
will definitely get more emotional support through kind words and can reduce tension and pressure of their daily life when they are being surrounded by peers
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a child is more sensitive to negative emotions and they have a tendency to imitate their seniors
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social structure children
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totally withdraw
from active social life
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a single child
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result, they
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Parents are busy with their jobs
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children may feel unwanted and they pretend themselves as their favourite
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video game
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these characters are featured with violent attitude
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and their memory is
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beating
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wrestling others
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the substantial increase in juvenile delinquency is basically related to immature emotional growth and less opportunities for social gathering
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So I definitely agree with the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aggression
  • Conflict resolution
  • Empathy
  • Parental guidance
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Media influence
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Violent crime
  • Youngsters
  • Anti-social behavior
  • Socialization
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Psychological development
  • Crime prevention strategies
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