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People from poor rural areas often have difficulty getting into good universities. Therefore, universities should make it easier for these people to be accepted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The good universities are frequently unreachable in rural communities, and
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 they should make the registrations more achievable. I,
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, disagree with
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 statement for two reasons. To commence with,
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 will cause the problems in selecting students who match the institutions’ identities. Certain academies have their own strong points and prominent fields of study; some provide intensive lessons about science, while others emphasize the important contents about economics and histories.
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 University,
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, is famous for the political and business management courses, where the entrance exams have evaluated the overall knowledge and interest of each
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candidate
.
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, the faculties gain qualified students and continue
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to establish
 their fame.
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, if the assessment is too easy, they will lose their
performance which
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performance, which
eventually attract
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eventually attracts
 less intelligent students.
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, the institutions will face the problems of lacking in financial support. The attended candidates always pay the tuition fee which
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is sometimes considered
 a
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higher
 expenditure.
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, to lower the costs, which are necessary for improving the facilities, because of the
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 students will halt the development of the organizations. From my experience, the
school’s
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school
 fees are exploited for buying new teaching equipment and restoring the depleted instrument in the classes.
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, the lower income would resist the long-
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running
 processes that have been designed and decided for many years. In conclusion, I totally disagree that the universities should make themselves easier to get in as
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 would decrease their own ability and budget. With the support from the government, there have been the scholarships available for low-income class communities which give the opportunities for the poor.

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