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Some people believe that technology has made man more social and others think it has made him less social. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #technology #man
The two pictures show the development of the Clock Tower Roundabout in Dubai in recent decades. Over the period, there are significant changes, especially the increases in buildings and transports. In the past, at the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of the crossroads, a clock tower roundabout was constructed with
unique design
Suggestion
a unique design
. There were only a few tall buildings scattered around the roundabout. A small residence located
seperately
apart from others
separately
 at the
second
 left corner.
Moreover
, alongside the streets, a lot of evenly spaced trees were planted. In comparison, at present, the number of skyscrapers and large buildings have been significantly rose up. The trees on the streets have been knocked down in order to construct these buildings.
However
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 has planted many trees surrounding the Clock Tower. Due to the growth of population, transportation
have been
Suggestion
has been
 considerably developed. In present-day Dubai, there are a lot of vehicles circulating around the central place of the roundabout.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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