The availability of unhealthy food, such as fast food and junk food, has become more widespread in recent years. What are some of the problems associated with this development and what action can be taken to solve them?

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In recent year, there has been a huge change in eating habits with the shift to unhealthy convenience foods.
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has led to a
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of negative consequences and the consumption of fast
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has led to serious health effects in today's society. But it is still possible to minimize them if
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the state
and we need to implement. The
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problem is that many people do not have time to prepare and sit down to eat healthy meals, so
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they turn to fast
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, leading to a rapid increase in obesity.
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, it is thought that unhealthy foods are cheaper and are consumed by
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the working classes
in greater quantities than more expensive fresh
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such
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as: fish, meat, fruits, vegetables,... The
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problem is unhealthy chemicals and preservatives in processed foods and that are the cause of fatal heating problems like cardiovascular disease and cancer.
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, students save money to buy books, so they often eat very economically and buy processed foods like: noodles, canned fish,... Because of
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eating for a long time should have some illness
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as
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a stomachache
. There are
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a
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of measures that
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governments
the government
can take to reduce the impact to the aforementioned causes. With hours
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of
social time, the law should limit working hours and change people's eating habits. To address the cost issue, the government could raise higher taxes on unhealthy
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and support the provision of fresh
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for working-class families. The state should directly address
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processing manufacturers whose preservatives are harmful to people and impose heavy penalties on producers. In conclusion, a
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of measures can be taken to combat health-related issue related to unhealthy
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consumption. If
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actions are not
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addressed, it
is likely that these problems will become more common and lead to a large
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of deaths.
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