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These days' children are surrounded by electronic devices such as personal computers, tablet computers, and smart phones, and they learn to use them at a very early age. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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In
high-tech world
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the high-tech world
a high-tech world
 the variety of electronic gadgets are available for children in easy way, that they are could be using these devices when they are very young. New generation
compare
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compares
 with their parent have
big jump
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a big jump
big jumps
 to accesses technology and data
by
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from
 smart devices
.
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.
however
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However, this
However this
this
 phenomenon
have
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has
 some advantage for
child
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the child
children
a child
, overusing of it will surely have some disadvantage. Using gadget like
smart phone
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a smart phone
, laptop, tablet and other could be helped children to improve their knowledge. Early age person who live all around the world might be
search
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searching
 on the internet or use many
application
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applications
 which install on the smart phone for
gain
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gaining
many
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much
 information and learn some skills.
For
instance for
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instance, for
 learning foreign languages we have many
kind
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kinds
 of application which learn children in any age step by step as same as school teachers. These devices would be having some terrible drawbacks contain mentally and physically. If children consume
majority
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a majority
the majority
 of their life to access smart tools it can be bad effected on their body or lead to some diseases
such
 as body deformation.
Moreover children
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Moreover, children
 who dedicate lots of time in
day
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the day
a day
 to use of smart phone or other devices who do not need to interact with their family or friends. It may even result in depression, aggression or other mental disorder in the long time. To sum up,
although
 these days children could have more opportunities for boosting their skills and knowledge that will be introduced better world for
next generation
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the next generation
,
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,
 they are would be effected with serious damages which are continues for good.
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