These days' children are surrounded by electronic devices such as personal computers, tablet computers, and smart phones, and they learn to use them at a very early age. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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high-tech world

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the high-tech world

a high-tech world

the variety of electronic gadgets are available for children in easy way, that they are could be using these devices when they are very young. New generation

compare

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compares

with their parent have

big jump

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a big jump

big jumps

to accesses technology and data

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from

smart devices

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however

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However, this

However this

this

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phenomenon

have

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has

some advantage for

child

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the child

children

a child

, overusing of it will surely have some disadvantage. Using gadget like

smart phone

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a smart phone

, laptop, tablet and other could be helped children to improve their knowledge. Early age person who live all around the world might be

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searching

on the internet or use many

application

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applications

which install on the smart phone for

gain

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gaining

many

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much

information and learn some skills.

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instance for

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instance, for

learning foreign languages we have many

kind

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kinds

of application which learn children in any age step by step as same as school teachers. These devices would be having some terrible drawbacks contain mentally and physically. If children consume

majority

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a majority

the majority

of their life to access smart tools it can be bad effected on their body or lead to some diseases

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as body deformation.

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Moreover children

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Moreover, children

who dedicate lots of time in

day

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the day

a day

to use of smart phone or other devices who do not need to interact with their family or friends. It may even result in depression, aggression or other mental disorder in the long time. To sum up,

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these days children could have more opportunities for boosting their skills and knowledge that will be introduced better world for

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next generation

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the next generation

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they are would be effected with serious damages which are continues for good.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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These days' children are surrounded by electronic devices such as personal computers, tablet computers, and smart phones, and they learn to use them at a very early age. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

Fully explain your ideas

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree.

in many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining.why do you think this is happening?how can this issue be solved?

The advantages brought by the spread of English as “a global language” will outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

Currently, majority of people are willing to travel around the world to visit the sight seeying places because it is much more easier now as apposed to past. There are several benefits of tourism and there are outweigh the drawbacks.

The linegraph gives information about the number of production (in million tonnes) of pulp, timber and paper in European country between 1980 and 2000