Some people believe that reading stories from books is better than watching TV and playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #stories #books #tv #computer #games #children

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

modern era

Suggestion

the modern era

, humankind has been submerged with the burgeoning development of advanced technologies. It is commonly thought that the advantages of reading books outweigh those of watching TV programmes and playing video games. To my viewpoint, I completely agree with

this

Linking Words

notion for the following reasons. To commence with, several significant benefits of printed texts should be taken into consideration.

First

Linking Words

and foremost,

reading

Suggestion

Reading

books

stimulates

Suggestion

stimulate

children’s imagination and logic thinking. With a view to understanding the context, they have to congregate,

analyze

consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

analyse

and infer information in details. That triggers their creativeness and brain reactions

Accept space

Additionally

Linking Words

, children who read books frequently have more scopes to boost up language skills

Accept space

Since books are plentiful sources of words, a kid can enhance his vocabulary as well as pronunciation.

Therefore

Linking Words

, it leads to a solid base of languages, which improves their ability to express their ideas confidently and obviously.

However

Linking Words

, the digital devices

such

Linking Words

as computer, TV has some considerable drawbacks to children if improperly used.

Initially

Linking Words

, children are likely to suffer from some problems

such

Linking Words

as obesity or backache owing that they spend a long time sitting in front of

screen

Suggestion

the screen

a screen

screens

instead

Linking Words

of doing other activities. Some researches have proven the relation between screen time and obesity. A couch potato is more prone to get obese than usual.

Secondly

Linking Words

, if children are not under parental control, their personalities may be adversely affected by violent or depraved contents contained in films or games. It can lead to

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

behavioural

deterioration in teenagers. In short, I strongly believe that children should be encouraged to read more rather than use

technological

Suggestion

technology

products since it is an effective way to study and better for health.

Nevertheless

Linking Words

, parents and children should be fully aware of potential

drawbacks so

Accept comma addition

drawbacks, so

as to make the most of aforementioned modern tools.

Submitted by Huyền Giang on Mon Jul 06 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

302 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

imagination
creativity
visualize
deeper understanding
language comprehension
critical thinking
empathy
perspectives
emotional benefits
concentration
attention span
cognitive development
educational programs
interactive
stimulate
relaxation
reduce stress

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
in some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in what are the reasons for this? How can people research this?
There is an increasing number of people in some countries, who took interest in tracing the historical information of residence where they live. In my opinion, they search for this for many reasons, maybe out of curiosity, or for their own safety. To help find answers, they should ask the elderly in the neighbourhoods.
6.5
band
Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, more and more animals have become extinct. I firmly believe that this notion happened because of both natural conditions and human activity. This essay will examine those reasons deeply and provide some possible solutions.
4.5
band
Some people believe that the widespread use of technology in education has improved learning, while others think it has led to more distractions and decreased the quality of education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Using technology is an essential topic to discuss and analyze at the same time that most people are interested daily. In the recent time, this point is important. Otherwise, it is controversial. It is important to speak about the pros and cons of using technology for people.
<4
band
Most people believe that social media such as facebook and instagram negatively impact on society and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Thank you for sending me an email, I’m excited to see what you wrote for me. Sorry for not writing to you for a long time, I’ve been very busy lately.
8
band
You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part-time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer
I am writing to request you to mitigate my working hours as I want to study part-time. My name is Urvesh Dudhat. I am working as a Java developer in your company. My employee ID is 25xx52.

Some people believe that reading stories from books is better than watching TV and playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

in some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in what are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some people believe that the widespread use of technology in education has improved learning, while others think it has led to more distractions and decreased the quality of education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Most people believe that social media such as facebook and instagram negatively impact on society and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part-time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer