A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include Problems they have now Suggestions to change How they could make these changes
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter to share my suggestions and ideas regarding the renovation of the school
. Recently, I read the article in the newspaper that school
wants suggestions about the infrastructure related
improvements.
I have done my education in the same Add a hyphen
infrastructure-related
school
and know the issues faced by students. In my opinion
the major issues are with the laboratories Add a comma
,opinion
such
as computers, physics and chemistry. These labs require new equipments
as most are old and do not work as expected. Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
In addition
to this
, the projectors that are installed in the classrooms are either not working or do not have the clarity which is impacting the learning practices.
In my view, better and upgraded computers, high-tech labs and sufficient good quality projectors are required on priority
basis along with other non-essential changes Correct article usage
a priority
such
as expanding playground and renovating classes. Recommendations
that I am sharing are based on my experience in the Correct article usage
The recommendations
school
.
All the equipments
can be purchased by either directly contacting any multinational hardware company or their agents to buy authenticated licensed products.
I look forward to Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
see
the changes in the Change the verb form
seeing
school
.
Regards,
Barry RichardsonSubmitted by MEHAK on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite