A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include Problems they have now Suggestions to change How they could make these changes

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to share my suggestions and ideas regarding the renovation of the
school
. Recently, I read the article in the newspaper that
school
wants suggestions about the
infrastructure related
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improvements. I have done my education in the same
school
and know the issues faced by students. In my
opinion
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the major issues are with the laboratories
such
as computers, physics and chemistry. These labs require new
equipments
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equipment
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as most are old and do not work as expected.
In addition
to
this
, the projectors that are installed in the classrooms are either not working or do not have the clarity which is impacting the learning practices. In my view, better and upgraded computers, high-tech labs and sufficient good quality projectors are required on
priority
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basis along with other non-essential changes
such
as expanding playground and renovating classes.
Recommendations
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The recommendations
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that I am sharing are based on my experience in the
school
. All the
equipments
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equipment
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can be purchased by either directly contacting any multinational hardware company or their agents to buy authenticated licensed products. I look forward to
see
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the changes in the
school
. Regards, Barry Richardson
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