Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

nowadays, increasing technology provides
various
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plenty of choices to choose
, when
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it comes to
the
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gadgets, everyone carries a smartphone,
laptops
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so on; for the same purpose. even booming industry provides these gadgets with lots of features at affordable cost and makes people
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to select one.
for instance-recently
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I showed enthusiasm to buy a phone.
at
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that moment
their
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are
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various companies like Apple,
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,
so
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and so
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on;
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offers
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plenty of phones with the same features at different affordable costs which
makes
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me perplexed to buy one.
in addition
, these days, the education system offers a myriad of choices in offering courses to study.As a country grows to coop up with the increasing technology, universities
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variety
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of engineering courses like computer science, mechanical engineering, Information Technology so on; so that the young generation can continue in the desired program by choosing them.
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only that but
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it provides campus placement options to select and work in the company
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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