The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and indicate any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is being concerned by sections of society that the minimum standard of people's health
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will be
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at
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greater
risk in the
future
than the present. I disagree with the statement.
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essay will decipher various reasons for my standpoint and provide examples to justify my ideas.
To begin
with, life expectancy of one person
is highly be
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has highly been
increase
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increased
increasing
because of the advancement of the
technology
we have in the present and I think it will be more
hitech
intense sorrow caused by loss of a loved one (especially by death)
heartache
in the
future
due to the said reason.
Furthermore
, there are many
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evidences
that aside from the medical care given and many hospital facilities with high
technology
that can easily detect illness are invented and will be in the
future
.
This
can be illustrated by the machine like magnetic resonance imaging that help to find the cause of the problem in the
body
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body, therefore
therefore
the high chance of more advance tech will be
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developed
in the
future
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, there is a
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evidence
that cancer can now cure because of the ongoing case study that have been focusing by many
scientist
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scientists
.
Moreover
, I believe because of the human are more
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
and due to help of many
technology
,
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,
there will be more
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a creation (a new device or process) resulting from study and experimentation
innovations
inventions
that help
person
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people
the person
persons
to increase their life expectancy. In conclusion,
technology
advancement
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has
a great help to increase the life of one person and with the help of
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
scientist any diseases will be cured or detect easily in the
future
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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