Some people say that technology such as mobile phones (cell phones) is destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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The number of
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whom
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have their own cell phone
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dramatically in the
last
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years
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.
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, many
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concern
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about how widely the
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of
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affects
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socialization. In my perspective, the overuse of
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has been harmful
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relationship
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relationships
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among
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. Of course that
technology
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has been useful for
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the majority
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of fields around the world.
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, the growth in
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use
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the use
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of devices
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as mobile phones was significant
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compared to
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at least ten
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.
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, these devices had
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up among
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earlier than
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a few
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years
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ago.
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, it is possible
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in public places
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as shopping
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, many kids with their own cell
phone
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phones
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playing
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on several programs created specially
to
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children and infants
“have
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to “have
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some fun” alone.
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, apps have been created to reach each specific age and cover all
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who want to stay away from others. Another point to consider is that social media has been contributing
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social distancing in a silent way.
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, these days on birthdays,
people
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replace an embrace or a phone call
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text messages and emoji which was created
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also
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to make conversations shorter. Even more, there are distinct virtual cards developed
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what to say on special days.
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, it seems that the
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of
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has
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people
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unconsciously stay far from families and friends and sometimes cannot notice that it
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is happening
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.
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,
technology
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and social media
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to be the
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reason to provide a crack on social interaction.
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, the
further
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use
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of these things and
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the high
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high tech
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high-tech
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lifestyle seems to continue increasing in
next
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the next
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years
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.
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