Some people say that technology such as mobile phones (cell phones) is destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?
The number of
people
whom
have their own cell phone Change the pronoun
who
rocket
dramatically in the Add a missing verb
has rocket
last
years
. Correct quantifier usage
few years
Consequently
, many people
concern
about how widely the Add a missing verb
are concern
use
of technology
affects the
socialization. In my perspective, the overuse of Correct article usage
apply
technology
has been harmful for
Change the preposition
to
relationship
among Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
people
. Of course that technology
has been useful for majority
of fields around the world. Add an article
the majority
a majority
In addition
, the growth in use
of devices Add an article
the use
such
as mobile phones was significant comparing
at least ten Wrong verb form
compared to
years
.
Rephrase
ago.
Therefore
, these devices had coming
up among Change the verb form
come
people
earlier than few
Change the article
a few
years
ago. For instance
, it is possible notice
in public places Add the particle
to notice
such
as shopping mall
, many kids with their own cell Fix the agreement mistake
malls
phone
Fix the agreement mistake
phones
playing
on several programs created specially Wrong verb form
play
to
children and infants Change preposition
for
“have
some fun” alone. Fix the infinitive
to “have
Hence
, apps have been created to reach each specific age and cover all people
who want to stay away from others. Another point to consider is that social media has been contributing for
social distancing in a silent way. Change preposition
to
For example
, these days on birthdays, people
replace an embrace or a phone call for
text messages and emoji which was created Change preposition
with
also
to make conversations shorter. Even more, there are distinct virtual cards developed Rephrase
apply
to sum up
what to say on special days. Furthermore
, it seems that the use
of technology
has making
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made
people
unconsciously stay far from families and friends and sometimes cannot notice that it happen
. Wrong verb form
is happening
To conclude
, technology
and social media seems
to be the Change the verb form
seem
mainly
reason to provide a crack on social interaction. Change the adverb
main
However
, the further
use
of these things and Correct article usage
the high
high tech
lifestyle seems to continue increasing in Add a hyphen
high-tech
next
Correct article usage
the next
years
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