Some people feel that the media influences social behavior, while others feel it simply mirrors it. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Few people believe that social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
is affected by
media
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the media
, while others think it simply reflects it. The essay will
firstly
discuss how it influences social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of
people
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people, then
then
secondly
if it only mirrors it
.
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.
In my opinion, media
affects
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affect
social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of people as well as mirrors it. Things which are shown in
media
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the media
are imitated by
people whether
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people, whether
good or bad.
This
kind of exposure is not good in some cases.
For example
,
bad
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the bad behaviour
bad behaviour
behavior
of people shown on TV
shows etc
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shows, etc.
shows etc.
is for entertainment
purpose but
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purpose, but
some people inculcate
such
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in
thier
of them or themselves
their
real life which make them socially bad. Another example is reality shows
,
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,
they can change the way public behave as they have a lot of drama
,
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,
people might try to adapt that in day to day life with
thier
of them or themselves
their
own family and friends.
However in
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However, in
other cases there is
also
good influence of media on
social
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the social behaviour
social behaviour
behavior
of people. Like, watching good programs improves
social
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the social behaviour
social behaviour
behavior
of people.
Also another
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Also, another
topic which affects social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of people is social media. It has resulted in a lot of negative impact on
few people's mind
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a few people's minds
few people's minds
.
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.
They feel a constant need to be in a competition with others which is a negative thing. Sometimes they forget to enjoy the moment itself in order to present it through photos and videos properly on social media. Social media
also
mirrors
social
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the social behaviour
social behaviour
behavior
of
people
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people, for
for instance
crime shows which reflects
peoples
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people's
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
and indeed helps in creating awareness
.
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.
In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
think that media affects as well as reflects
social
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the social behaviour
social behaviour
behavior
of people. Too much bad media can affect social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
negatively.
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