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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is fact that people around the world are still starving to death.Even though science is growing bigger and faster modern technologies are being invented for agricultural use.In
this
 essay I will be discussing about its causes and what can be done about
this
 problem. Major causes for starvation is poverty and rapidly increase in population growth.Population is growing rapidly and
thus
 demand for food is
also
 increasing, in todays modern world science is inventing anonymous advances in agriculture.Technologies are being made, but in remote areas, farmers are still using rudimentary techniques,
thus
 the production of food is low.Many farmers lack knowledge of
advance
 technologies and
thus
 they do not choose to use it. Advanced technologies are being done, but many farmers are not privileged and
advance
 technologies mean adoption cost is high and
thus
 they cannot afford it.Despite of
advance
 technologies natural calamities like flood, extreme rainfall and drought in some counties like Africa and some part of India can't be controlled.No technology is made to prevent problems like
this
. The problem regarding the same topic can be solved by giving government subsidies for underprivileged farmers so that they can adapt new
advance
 technologies and use it to produce more and more food.Causes like the natural calamities government needs to work on technologies, developing how to prevent problem like flood and drought as well as.Government needs to provide proper knowledge and guidance on how using modern technologies can help personal growth as well as government growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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