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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.Do you think is a positive or negative development?

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There has been a drastic debate over whether is good or not for countries becoming more and more similar due to people are able to buy the same products anywhere. In my personal viewpoint, my attitude towards it is positive, I believe the case of
this
 can be beneficial. In
this
 case where we can buy the same products anywhere is a kind of globalization, and globalization is a main trend in the world. In
this
 situation, we can gain a lot benefit from it.
Firstly
, it will help to narrow the gaps between rich countries and poor countries. Poor countries derive the right and access to buy commodities as same as the rich one, which will increase public satisfaction greatly and improve living quality.
In addition
, buying the same products anywhere is able to promote a competition among the retailers, which can not only lower the price of goods, but
also
 better products' quality.
Besides
,
this
 kind of globalisation will inject energy for companies to upgrade their machines, increasing companies' productivity and earning at the same time.In
this
 process, it has a possibility for different countries to tighten their connection and strengthen communication
,
Accept space
,
letting more and more companies to exchange their information and technologies, which eventually can lift society efficiency. In terms of the reasons above, I imagine that
this
 kind of fusion of market is positive, not only can it benefit customers, but
also
 do good to the whole market. We are able to insist on globalization, where all of countries profit from it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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