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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students’ sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree?

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There has to be no difference in the amount of budget the University distributes on physical education and the library. Personally, I agree that universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activity as they give to their university library.
First
 of all, not every student is a scholar, which means everyone has a hobby and not everyone likes studying. A common adage illustrating my perspective is, a healthy mind in a healthy body. There are some students who prefer sports over studies and they get the benefits of physical and mental strength development, especially preventing bookworm which causes a headache, a bad posture and an inability to be practical.
Furthermore
, indulging in sports activities is a scientifically proven way of accelerating blood circulation to all parts of the body, particularly, the brain, which sustains the brain for the work it needs to do in the library. It will
also
 add good posture and real life experiences, which will go a long way to make him a successful human being.
Besides
, It will not only improve their health, but
also help
Suggestion
also helps
has also helped
 them in developing skills
such
 as teamwork, handling pressure under tensed situations etc. Recently there has been too much studied by students. In order to relax and re-energise,
such
 activities should be provided at a regular interval.
In addition
, it will develop the University's reputation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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