A person's worth now a days seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions . Old _ fashioned values , such as honour ,kindness and trust ,no longer seem important . To what extent do you agree or disagree ? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience .

The modern
society
has witnessed a change in the way of thinking about an
individuals
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individual
value
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If a
person
owns a mansion or a brand new car
also
a designer dress has been considered as the most eligible
person
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But
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in the past people with a
philanthropist
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philanthropic
attitude and moral values
such
as compassion
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trustworthy
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trustworthiness
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honesty were considered as the gentleman
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I completely agree with the opinion because of many external influences and many other factors
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Firstly
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media is a culprit to bring
this
attitude
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which always interested in celebrity news and knowingly or unknowingly people are following a celebrity culture
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For example
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when a youngster watch TV
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many
programes
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
programmers
honour film actresses and
actors even
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actors, even
if it is a GK programme
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For
examble
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
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you can
also
become a
millionare
a person whose material wealth is valued at more than a million dollars
millionaire
show was anchored by Amithabh Bachen
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however most
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however, most
of the questions are related to academic subjects they never give
chance
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a chance
the chance
for a college professor or a
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bureaucrat
bureaucrats
to conduct
this
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Secondly
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people are living in a money based
society
where everything cost
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as a
result people
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result, people
know that earning money is a daunting
task
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task, therefore
therefore
, if a
person
seems financially sound they are considered as the most
sucessful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
personal
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Also
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even the education is considered as a way to make money
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Students are forced to study by parents just for getting a white collar job not to serve the
society
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Hence
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humanitarian values
such
as love, sympathy and empathy
are not teaching
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are not taught
in schools
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Moreover
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if a
person
hold
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holds
moral values and social
etiquettis
rules governing socially acceptable behavior
etiquette
atrocities
they may encounter many difficulties
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For example
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apparently S I Varadaraj and family were
bruttaly
in a vicious manner
brutally
murdered as he conducted his case investigation in
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an
honest way
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This
send
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sends
a wrong message to
society
and nobody wants to risk their life by acting too good to others.
In addition
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people lack good
rolemodels
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role models
in their life
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For example
, in the past
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Mahathma
(Hinduism) term of respect for a brahmin sage
Mahatma
Gandhi
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Abraham
Lincon
16th President of the United States; saved the Union during the American Civil War and emancipated the slaves; was assassinated by Booth (1809-1865)
Lincoln
were the people's
heros
a man distinguished by exceptional courage and nobility and strength
heroes
hero
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unfortunately today's
polititions
a leader engaged in civil administration
politicians
are corrupted and holding notorious names in the
society
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To conclude, people's shift in the attitude of priority to materialistic richness is definitely the outcome of media
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celebrities
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lack of good mentors
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influence
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influences
of global culture
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low
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
rate of honest people are the root cause of
this
trend
.
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