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Some people think that increasing communication usage of computers and mobile phones by young people has had a negative effect on their reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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According to some people,
augmenting way
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the augmenting way
an augmenting way
 to communicate by utilization of advance technology
such
 as computers and telephones has had
a
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an
 extremely adverse impact on their reading and writing techniques. I completely agree with
this
 notion as it deteriorates our basic skills. Taking into the account usage of cyber slangs, auto correct mode and symbols to express our feelings and emotions rather than writing in a formal way, affecting our writing
skill
.
In addition
, when we read some books just to pass an examination
also
 lead to drastically affect our reading
skill
.
However
, we can write quickly and early by utilizing smart phones and
computers but
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computers, but
 writing is an art and natural way of writing will get lost if everything is auto corrected by technology.
Therefore
, one should polish and enhance their
skill
 of reading and writing by avoiding smart gadgets. Another pivotal aspect is that communication many a times misjudged by using various symbols and result in different conclusion which is a serious issue and act as a barrier in communication. There is a word limit on various technological platforms
such
 as twitter,
instagram
,
facebook
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Facebook
,
etc which
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etc., which
etc. which
 is a serious soaring concern for a good writer and reading on various gadgets result in eye problems, concentration problems.
Moreover
, it will ultimately
leads
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lead
 to the declining culture of reading during early stage of life where minor mistake will impact our future course of action. To sum up,
although
 it saves our time while addressing via different
gadgets but
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gadgets, but
 our overall growth will be dependent
on technology only
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only on technology
 and our holistic development of reading and writing
skill
 severely affected.
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