In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

There are statement in some cultures, Students can achieve anything by putting their ultimate hard-work. There are
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a plethora
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of benefits by telling to children like
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they put their
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hard work
as their best, they can win anything.
First
and foremost, it gives them
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confidence
, so they can
do
engage in
make
their wishes needed without any hesitation. Most of the teenagers not doing their work without giving a single try by thinking they are not capable. If they are confident, they will give some try.
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matter whether they win or lose.
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experience and know about where they are lagging, how to achieve it
next
time.
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a stage
the stage
of over-confident, they don'
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carry about others. In fact, they don'
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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