In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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as their best, they can win anything.

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their wishes needed without any hesitation. Most of the teenagers not doing their work without giving a single try by thinking they are not capable. If they are confident, they will give some try.

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Topic Vocabulary:

achieve
try hard
positive mindset
self-belief
motivates
ambitious goals
resilience
determination
confidence
self-esteem
growth mindset
unrealistic expectations
disappointment
failure
effort
hard work
seek support
individual differences
abilities
capabilities

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Fully explain your ideas

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