We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

Peoples may not
had
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have
emphasized the importance of computers would be so widespread in the near future. Due to, its processing speed and befitting response to anonymous threats. Nowadays,
use
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the use
of computer unit has become more widespread. At
present time
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the present time
, PCs are used in
every thing
all things
everything
ranging from small scale business to large scale or multinational companies.
However
, the usage is quite ubiquitous.
For instance
, to record the data of patients in hospital. Since, the technology is getting vitally advanced there will be a number of applications in coming time.
Initially
, there are
huge number
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huge numbers
a huge number
of communicable diseases around the globe. In countries like Japan and Thailand authorities are devising a strategy that to cure individuals with these chronic diseases’ robots will be used.
Hence
, human involvement decreases
as a result
, they will be able to control the spread of virus by adopting
this
strategy.
Additionally
, machines in accordance with artificial intelligence will create robots that can help or even do household chores or all
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
activities that are done by humans. Automated robots will be used in hospitals, malls, cinemas, to serve peoples.
For example
, Japan will be utilizing self-operated robots as cheerleader and spectators
in
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at
volleyball games during
coronavirus
.
Initially
, there are innumerable disadvantages if mankind will start to rely on computers. Many hackers use hacking
platforms including
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platforms, including
: trojan horses, phishing, pharming, worms, malware attacks to steal personal or confidential data like password of bank accounts or social accounts.
Consequently
, robots will replace humans as workers in upcoming
days which
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days, which
will rapidly increase unemployment. To conclude, due to
development
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the development
of
technology computers
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technology, computer
technology computer
technology computer's
application will exponentially increase.
As a result
, it will
also
surge the productivity as an
allrounder
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all rounder
performance but
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performance, but
cyber attacks will
also
swell. But drastic measures can be taken to enhance security.
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