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The natural resources such as oil, fresh water, and forests are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause and how can we solve these problems?

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In the modern era of technology, usage of mineral deposits like fuel, trees, and clean
water
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is abruptly increasing
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has abruptly increased
abruptly increases
 day by day.
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give
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gives
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birth to
 many problems
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 as running out of fossil fuels, extinction of many species, serious health problems and many more. The main problem faced by many countries due to excessive usage of drinking
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 is the shortage of safe
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,
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 of which many countries experience drought in some areas.
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, Industries emits waste in rivers due to which
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 become polluted, and most of the human beings is suffering from chronic diseases.
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For
 example, In India a research showed that people living near industrial areas have more life threatening diseases as compared to those who live in remote areas. Oil is another resource which is used excessively.
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 is a non-renewable resource which is used in vehicles. Growing transportation by air, road and sea put pressure on burning of fossil fuels, which release Carbon dioxide gas and it leads to the problem of global warming.
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 to
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, cutting down enormous areas of rainforest for
living
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the living
 of the human species is another major cause of extinction of wildlife and plants. It disturbs the ecological system and create extreme weather conditions
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 as melting of polar ice, volcanic eruption, earthquakes and floods. One effective solution to save fresh
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 is
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That
 government should penalize the industries which discharge wastes in rivers. Government should provide
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 at some cost so that, individuals cannot take
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 for granted and use it wisely. In order to save over environment every person should plant trees and natural areas and wildlife should
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 be protected by government. Usage of renewable resources
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 as solar,
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 and wind energy in spite of fossil fuels helps in the healing procedure of earth. To illustrate, In U.K, 70% of pollution Caused by burning of fossil fuels is reduced by the rising usage of the Nuclear power station. In conclusion, greater consumption of natural resources, create
threat
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a threat
 to earth as well as life of animals and human beings. In order to deal with these problems, scarce resources
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 as
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, oil and forests should be used wisely.
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