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In the past, photography was used to real people and places; however, because of technology, today you cannot trust what you see. Is it a negative or positive aspect of development?

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In recent years, the
development
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 of technology in taking photos has become increasing as well as its impact on human life. Years ago, taken pictures were from objective individuals and places. Nowadays,
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, it is plausible to take artificial pics. As the current essay discusses, the possibility of editing photos is a downside of
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 in
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 special field. The ability to take unreal photos could be the negative
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 of
development
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 in some cases. In the tourism industry, the cutting-edge cameras, which are generally used for photography, can edit the photos directly or via a computer and build a wrong illustration of a landscape to attract more tourists. While tourists decide to visit a country, edited pictures could be tricky for them when
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the pics
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. Another negative
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 is personal documents, which contain personal photos as evidence.
Had personal pics became
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Did personal pics become
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, the identity of individuals would have not recognizable.
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, the trend of committing the crimes will increase remarkably. These reasons demonstrate that negative
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 of
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 could be dangerous for both individual and society. Having said that, some people may argue that being able to take unreal pictures is the positive
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 of
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 in technology.
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, these people can bright and clear old-taken from their old ages, which are valuable to them, by applying the option of editing pictures.
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, the special and family occasions that are held by ordinary people in cities, could be less expensive. These people commonly may fancy pictures from their ceremony. Thereby,
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 of pay for the unnecessary stuff to help pics seem more beautiful, they could beautify the pictures by special camera tools.
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Indeed, it
 is believed that the positive
side
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 of
development
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 in photography must be considered. It is concluded that there are both negative and positive sides to getting progress in taking photos;
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, the negative
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 is even more powerful than the positive
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.

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