Some people think that people are having less communication between family members today than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Frequently exposed to mountains of information
on
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in
to
the mass media, the general public
are kept
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is kept
informed by the latest news report regarding
communication
among family members. Meanwhile, some people claim that in
this
modern-day, the conversation between the family members is less than before. In the essay, I am in agreement with
this
statement. Some in
favor
promote over another
favour
of the viewpoint
claim
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claims
that due to the development of modern
communication
tools, family member can interact more with each other than the past.
First
and foremost, it should be pointed out that modern chatting apps are time-effective and cost-saving. In comparison with traditional way of interaction, taking advantage of
fast-speed internet
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the fast - speed internet
, individuals can use various chatting apps,
such
as
Wechat
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We chat
, Facebook, and Whatsapp, which certainly allows family members to keep
strong connection
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a strong connection
between each other.
Likewise
, the application of video call
have
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has
positive impacts in keeping the bond between people.
This
means that people are no longer limited by geographical location, they can contact their family members whenever they want.
However
, under no circumstances could we ignore unfavourable aspects of less
communication
caused by the economic pressure,
generation
gap and intrusion of mobile technology. To be specific, the
sky-rocketing
propels bright light high in the sky, or used to propel a lifesaving line or harpoon
skyrocketing
property and commodity prices resulting from
continuous population explosion
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the continuing population explosion
continuing population explosion
and limited land resources impose heavy economic burden on the parents. Since they have to cover and increasing amount of living expenses, more personal time
are bound
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is bound
to be allocated on their works, which undoubtedly spends less time to communicate with their children. Another equally important aspect to be considered is that the
generation
gap between the young and old
generation
cannot be ignored.
This
means that due to the lack of understanding and tolerating, the clash of opinions
lead
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leads
to numerous conflicts
among
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between
family members, which exerts an adverse influence on family relationship and
communication
. What is
also
worth noticing is that over-concentration on mobile application distracts
people
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peoples'
peoples
person's
attention from
accompany
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accompanying
their family members, exacerbating a sense of alienation. The popularity of mobile games is a perfect case to exemplify how many precious hours is to waste in modern individuals' daily life. If people spend their time for having a meaningful conversation, more treasured family experiences could be created. In conclusion, I firmly agree that families interact less with each other now as compared to
past
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the past
. Despite the fact that technology has brought in newer means to ease
communication
, the economic pressures, the
generation
gap, and the distraction caused by technology should be regarded as contributing factors negatively impact the
communication
between family members.
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