Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Sharing
information
helps people to build their
knowledge
. Certain people believe that exchanging
information
related to scientific research, business and the academic world
is
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are
important, whereas others think that there is no need to share some of the valuable
information
freely. One evident benefit of exchanging
information
helps a
person
to expand his
knowledge
. Every
person
does not have every
information
on a
subject but
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subject, but
when we exchange details our
knowledge
expands manifold. To illustrate, a
person
preparing for his exam by doing group study, will know more about the subject in less time than a
person
studying individually.
On the other hand
, sharing
information
that is
valuable and important can lead you in serious situations as you don't know whether the other
person
is trustworthy or not.
For instance
, there was a case recently where a
person
working on a scientific formula shared his theory with his group, one of the
member
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members
of that group used
this
information
for his own benefit and sold that formula. To conclude, sharing
information
is a key to expand one's
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
this
may
also
result in passing on some of the salient details
.
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.
In my opinion, people must ensure what
information
are
least valuable
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less valuable
and would not affect anyone if they are shared, only
such
details need to be shared
insted
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
of
whole thing
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the whole thing
. In
this
way, one is able to expand his
knowledge
without any serious complications.
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