Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a debate that
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travelling by
air
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has to be stopped, as it's the cause of
an
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increased
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pollution and is a burden on
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oil products. I don't agree with
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, as the aeroplanes have reduced the distances and the journey has become comfortable. On the one hand, there is a belief that the index of the polluted
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has increased in the recent past, and it's related to more travelling by
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planes.
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, as the airline industry is the largest consumer of
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petroleum sources,
so
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it's considered that it may end the world's fuel resources. So to say, there should be a restriction on
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mode of transport, in order to save
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energy
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to make the environment clean.
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, the WHO has announced that the
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aircraft engines have to be developed to counter the smoke level in the
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.
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, in
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era of science and technology, the world has become a global village and one can fly from one corner of the earth to another in less than 24 hours. It is possible
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the technological advancement and new inventions of helicopters and
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machines, and I
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back
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idea.
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fast mode of travelling has a positive impact on the growth of business, as the transportation of goods has become easier.
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,
the
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tourism has flourished too much,
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enhancing the social ties between the countries.
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, the UAE government has developed Dubai as an economic hub by introducing multiple airlines
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the state.
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, in order to meet the fast pace of life, the mode of transportation has to be swift. In
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way, the country will not only remain connected with the rest of the globe
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but will
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flourish by leaps and bounds.
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