Wild animals have no use in the 21st century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money.

Wildlife
plays an integral part in the biodiversity. There has been a conception that untamed species are unsuitable in
this
modernistic
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modern
world and conserving them is
not
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Not
worth a penny.
Firstly
,
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,
this
essay will examine the importance of
wildlife
and
secondly it
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secondly, it
explains that protecting them is paramount with a suitable epitome to draw a logical conclusion. Two main factors
states
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state
that wild animals are needed to mankind.
First
and foremost is they are the heritage
to
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of
human race
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the human race
.
In other words
, wild animals
maintains
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Maintains
the food chain and the ecological balance. The
second
factor linked to the
first
is understanding the geographical aspect of climate from them. To illustrate, scientists discovered that studying
wildlife
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
and migrating patterns can assist in predicting the
earth quakes
shaking and vibration at the surface of the earth resulting from underground movement along a fault plane or from volcanic activity
earthquakes
and other natural disasters. Statistic records of
2004 tsunami
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the 2004 tsunami
in India proved
that
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That
only a
meager
deficient in amount or quality or extent
meagre
percentage of wild animals were trapped in the disaster compared to humans. In my opinion, saving wild
creatures not
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creatures, not
only aids in
scicentific
of or relating to the practice of science
scientific
studies but
also
attracts
toursim
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
becasue
for the reason that; on account of
because
of its aesthetic value.
Therefore protecting
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Therefore, protecting
the
wildlife
from
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From
poachers and other harmful diseases always favours the country.
For example
, the previous year, the total revenue from
wildlife
tourism
of
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in
Australia had reached to 40 billion dollars which contributed to 0.27
growth
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growths
in country's GDP. From the above analysis, it can be concluded that wild animals can be termed as the
conerstone
the fundamental assumptions from which something is begun or developed or calculated or explained
cornerstone
corner-stone
cornerstones
for human development and plays an important role in
country's economy
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the country's economy
a country's economy
. Though
government
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the government
has
critical role
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a critical role
in
wildlife
conservation, it is
also
everyone's
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
to support their living in
this
wary
physically and mentally fatigued
weary
world.
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