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Some believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss and give your opinion

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Global worming is the major concern of the todays world.Some opinion that people should take care of the
environment
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. On the other side some think that it's all about the
government
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 who should responsible for healthy
environment
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.In my opinion, it is the responsibility of both the citizen of the country as well as
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 itself in following essay I will discuss all the aspects. At
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, each individual is responsible to take care of the
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.Because without our contribution
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 can't do anything.
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, there are many rules made by the
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 to keep the atmosphere clean. Now it's up to us to obey the rules.Beside
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 there are many ways we can keep our surroundings clean by using less polluted way of transit and by planting trees and
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 on.
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, There are many ways that
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 can
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 help to make the
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 clean by imposing strict rules. Like exhaling less unhealthy fumes by factories as well as limiting people to use vehicles that spread more pollution.
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, in Sweden
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 make rules for limited use of personal vehicle in cities during weekends and
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 leads to a major improvement in air quality in less time, So by making law and regulation
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 play a vital role to combat against the problem. To conclude, it is the responsibility of both and any one of them fail to do so leads to failure of both.
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 it like clapping not possible without two hand same as people and
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 are two hands and without their effort we can't save the
environment
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.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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