You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear sir/madam, I am the leader of the Spanish Musicians Group that was assigned to use the
community
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hall every Tuesday and Friday
evenings
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evening

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. It is our pleasure that we are allowed to practice our hobby in the building. I have been told recently that starting
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Linking Words

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week, we are no longer accepted to perform in the
community
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

hall. We are all respectful musicians, and our performances are hugely welcome by not only the people from our
community
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but
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

friends from other
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods

The spelling of neighborhoods is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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. Audiences are able to request us to play their
favorite
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favourite

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songs or even take part in the performance. I believe that by delivering our shows, we are doing a good deed for the
community
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. Music is not only mean of relaxing but rather
than
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apply

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a fine method to express
the
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apply

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thoughts and love. I would suggest that we will move the practice time to 6:30 PM every Thursday and
Saturdays
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Saturday

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if possible. Please let me know your thought. I look forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Chi

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