You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear sir/madam, I am the leader of the Spanish Musicians Group that was assigned to use the

community

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hall every Tuesday and Friday

evenings

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evening

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. It is our pleasure that we are allowed to practice our hobby in the building. I have been told recently that starting

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week, we are no longer accepted to perform in the

community

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hall. We are all respectful musicians, and our performances are hugely welcome by not only the people from our

community

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but

also

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friends from other

neighborhoods

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neighbourhoods

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. Audiences are able to request us to play their

favorite

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favourite

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songs or even take part in the performance. I believe that by delivering our shows, we are doing a good deed for the

community

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. Music is not only mean of relaxing but rather

than

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apply

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a fine method to express

the

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apply

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thoughts and love. I would suggest that we will move the practice time to 6:30 PM every Thursday and

Saturdays

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Saturday

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if possible. Please let me know your thought. I look forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Chi

Nguyễn ChiFri Jul 10 2020

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

172 words

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