Some industrialised countries have serious environmental problems. The damage to the environment is an inevitable result when a country tends to improve the standard of living. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays industrialized nations tend to
lead to
Verb problem
be
concern
about pollution Replace the word
concerned
that
released by factories that Correct pronoun usage
apply
was
constructed to provide citizens with civilization. Change the verb form
were
This
essay will elaborate on both positive
and negative effects of outcomes Correct article usage
the positive
that
caused by Correct pronoun usage
apply
refine
of living standards. A great Wrong verb form
the refining
number
of regions tend to construct plants with the target to create
national products. Change preposition
of creating
For instance
, majority
of them Correct article usage
the majority
located
close to Add a missing verb
are located
city
with the aim Add an article
the city
a city
to transport
manufactured goods easily, Change preposition
of transporting
however
governments do not consider about consequences that may be caused by emissions. Other humans believe that having factories do
not make Correct subject-verb agreement
does
huge
impact on Add an article
a huge
milieu
, despite Correct article usage
the milieu
that
fact that pollution is the Correct determiner usage
the
number
one issue that an agenda of instance debate. In addition
to pollution, deforestation may lead to lack
of fauna in urban Correct article usage
a lack
ares
. A huge Correct your spelling
areas
number
of trees being
cut to make way for buildings that will Add a missing verb
are being
build
Wrong verb form
be built
up for providing
human beings with better facilities. Change preposition
to provide
However
, if citizens construct their housing by themselves, it will be more problematic with regard to the issue that a greater number
of plants will be cutting
down. Law representatives try to afford modification with the unavoidable impact on nature. By providing dwellers with the work place a great Wrong verb form
cut
number
of jobs will be profitable. A huge number
of money will be Investigated in forest conservation. Many researches
have found that countries with Correct your spelling
researchers
the
high salaries are more allocate financial support in the field of environment and the main reason is that their industries become independent of natural resources Correct article usage
apply
such
as coal and oil. From what has been discussed, one can reach a conclusion that emissions and deforestation with the purpose to be industrialized caused dangers to the milieu, meanwhile
employment could be Add a comma
meanwhile,
source
of finance that might be useful in saving flora. Add an article
a source
the source
Hence
, I believe that human beings with being closely connected to nature have to protect the main resource of living.Submitted by Dilnaz Torina on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite