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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opnion?

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Some people believe that the intellectual capacity of an individual can be best measured by his or her
success
 in life. Others support the idea that there are other methods of measuring one’s mental ability. In my opinion, I think that exist other means of measuring
intelligence
 which exclude
success
.
To begin
 with, some people consider
success
 the most accurate
measure
for
Suggestion
of
intelligence
. There are many reasons for
this
 opinion. Many persons in modern society are deemed intelligent because they have succeeded in their careers. Bill Gates, Richard Branson, Mark Zuckerberg are only a small part of examples for people who have achieved much in their lives. Very often these people are believed to have succeeded because of their extraordinary intellectual capacity. For these reasons,
success
 is said to be
universal
Suggestion
a universal measure
measure
for
Suggestion
of
intelligence
.
On the other hand
,
success
 is not enough reliable means by which intellect can be measured. Recently, scientists have proven that
intelligence
 is equal to the individuals’ adaptability. The ability to adapt to the constantly changing world is a more proper way to define one’s intellectual capacity.
For example
, human beings have survived throughout all these years because of their unique mental abilities which are best represented in the way they adjust to the new conditions. For
this
 reason, adaptability is, undoubtedly, another method of measuring
intelligence
. In conclusion, some people deem
success
 superior to any other
measure
for
Suggestion
of
intelligence
. Others believe that there are other ways which can
also
 be used to
measure
 individual’s intellect. I strongly believe that
success
 is not the best way
for
Suggestion
of
 measuring one’s mental abilities. For me, there are
also
 other ways
for
Suggestion
of
 defining how intelligent a person is. One of them is by observing their adaptability and how they react to changes.
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