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In the developed world,urban population is incresing. What are the main causes of this? What are the effects?

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The
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population
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 is increasing in developing countries. People are migrating from rural areas to
city
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 in search of job opportunities and better standard of living
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whereas it has resulted in lack of development in rural areas. Many people migrate from rural to urban
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 in search of better livelihood and standard of living.There is a wide gap in development in a rural area, which is unable to help local society with employment opportunities.
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 rural areas of India mainly focus on farming, so the people with others skills than farming are unable to survive. So to earn a livelihood, they migrate to an Indian metropolitan
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 which has an abundance of opportunity for everyone.
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The city
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 has a myriad of facilities which help in ease of living for people, the lack of facilities
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also drive
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also drives
 people to move from rural area to
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 for better standard of living. The human migration to
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city
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cities
the city
 has resulted in authorities to neglect the expansion in rural areas. Due to lack of improvement in the rural areas, they are struggling with basic amenities and facilities like Electricity, School's and Hospital's.
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, Many Indian villagers staying in the village have to travel more than 100 km to reach the nearby
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 for treatment in good hospitals. So when a village person compares his life with
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the city
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he prefers other life more.
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 migration has
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 impacted a cultural erosion, people forget their culture to mingle with urban
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. In Conclusion, the urban
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 will be always be trending
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however, this
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 can be reduced by developing the rural parts of the country which will create more opportunities and better standard of living for everyone. We can predict in future rural
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 will increase and can observe a decrease in urban
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.
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