More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

Every
year more
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year, more
and more students choose to
study
online rather than attend classes on campus. Why do you think students prefer to
study
online? What can universities do to attract students to
study
on campus? Studying online is becoming increasingly popular almost the students.
Nowaday
Suggestion
Nowadays
, students prefer to e-learning than face to face
education
.
This
essay will discuss every year students are more interesting to online
education
than formal
education
and what universities can do get them back to
classes
Suggestion
class
. To start with, students
chooce
pick out, select, or choose from a number of alternatives
choose
chose
choice
to distance-learning rather than to visit class because, e-
education
gives some advantages.
For instance
, visiting to class has some
requirenment
required activity
requirements
, like school uniform, and
this
requirenments
required activity
requirement
sometimes can be uncomfortable for pupils.
Furthermore
,
lecture
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the lecture
has been
cathched
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caught
catches
up by students whenever they go to
school but
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school, but
an e-
education
gives option for
reiteranting
tending to return to an earlier state
returning
lesson.
Hence
, pupils when do
homework they
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homework, they
can check to their doubt on online systems.
However
, distance- learning has
disadvantegas
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
disadvantage
. According to Aristotele
,
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,
Humans are social animals. I agree with his opinion, people always need to communicate with others.
Also
, school is the best social area for meeting new people and sharing to
memories but
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memories, but
an online
education
may not supply
this
opportunity.
University
Suggestion
The university
should improve their campus
opportinuties
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
for
attract
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attracting
to students..
For example
, they should work out the spring festival or development
to
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of
in
the their lab. And
also
, they provide to scholarship for
whoom
objective case of "who" ("who" is also often used in the objective)
whom
one
want
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wants
to have
education
in abroad. To conclude, students prefer an e-learning
rahter
on the contrary
rather
than the back to classes in
this
age. It has advantages and disadvantages.
This
education
system
is depend
Suggestion
depends
on the Internet and technology. In
additionaly
further or added
additional
additionally
,
university
Suggestion
the university
universities
should do activities and give chance for
impress
Suggestion
impressing
to pupils
study
on campus.
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