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Some say that self-employment is better than working in a company or in an institution. Discuss both views. What's your opinion on this?

#say #self-employment #company #institution
as
business
 fields have become complicated,
people
 try to find the fittest working style for their
business
. and there are
people
 who say that self-employment is better than working in a company. first of all, self-employment will
return
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with
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in
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 higher income. because most of
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the
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profit from selling products will be owners and there is no limit.
secondly
,
people
 who run their own
business
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businesses
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 learn a lot from their work. because they would deal with lots of
situation
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situations
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 that employees could never experience.
however
, self-employment is risky
in
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from
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financial
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a financial
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 view. because it is necessary to invest money to start and maintain the
business
 and no one would guarantee their decision. the
ower
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owner
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 should take all responsibility.
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on the other hand
,
people
 who
is
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 working in
company
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the company
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 will get specialized skill in their field. because employees are assigned
in
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to
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particular
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a particular
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 part and concentrate on their own part. and they can live with
stable
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a stable
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 salary.
as
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 long as they do their job, their salary is guaranteed.
however
, their salary is lower and limited.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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