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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..................,

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Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Kochensky, I, Alexandra Ben, an employee of
RedPath
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Redpath
 Co. on Adelaide Street,
London
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, Ontario. I have been working here for
past
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the past
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 2
year
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 as a Cloud Engineer, and within my service
period
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 I have been labelled as a sincere employee as well as acknowledge for an excellent involvement in the company's
fruitfullness
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fruitfulness
. Even though I have been professionally acclaimed for my
work
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 at
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London
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the London
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office
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, I would want to indulge in the overall process of company's
work
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 at Head
Office
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 in Toronto, I
beleive
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believe
 that will sharpen my skills as a Cloud Engineer, and provide me with capabilities to deliver better input at my position.
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, due to
this
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 current pandemic of NOVEL CORONA, we have been
esblished
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established
 as employees who can
work
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 remotely, and
this
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 gives me a chance to
work
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 progressively at head
office
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 as well as keep an eye
towards
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on
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 the projects I need to focus
in
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on in
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London
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. I will
also
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 keep an employee assistant to keep my hands on the
work
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 in
London
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. I hereby want to request you for some help, if possible, in arranging
an
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apply
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accomodation
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accommodation
at
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near
Toronto
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the Toronto
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office
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. Yours
faithufully
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faithfully
, Alexandra Ben
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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