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A lot of people spend a major part of their adult life at work, so job satisfaction is very important for individual happiness. What are the main factors that contribute to job satisfaction? What are the possible solutions for people who are unsatisfied with their jobs?

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The majority of our
life
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lives
is spent
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are spent
 in earning money,
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 it becomes necessary that we enjoy our
work
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. A person's interest and passion for the particular task are the major factors which
gives
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give
 a
person
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person's
 job
satisfaction
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. Today, a lot of working folk
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sees
 their job as a burden, so they really need to improve their skills which are required only
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 it would be possible for them to become satisfied with their jobs Nowadays, many people are trying to seek jobs in the field of their interest and passion. People who choose a field just for the sake of good salary often in
long run
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the long run
 find their
work
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 monotonous and ultimately see it as a stress. Contradictory to
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, it is seen that employers who are passionate about what they do are likely to get progress in their career and perform much better than those who do not like the job.
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,
this
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 success at workplace gives a person,
satisfaction
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 of what he or she is doing. In a very recent survey, it was found that people interested in their occupation had much more chance to reach to topmost position in their fields. But many employers are unsatisfied with their
work
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. They can certainly find happiness in their tasks by learning some new techniques used in their tasks. By getting engaged in learning helps develop curiosity towards their career and definitely aids them in performing their office assignment in a better way.
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, because of better task achievement at the office helps them get promoted higher and gives them a much needed thrust and motivation to
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 hard. In India many government institutions provide courses in different fields to help them gain mastery in their professions. To summarize, it is passion is the most needed quality in order to find
satisfaction
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, while for those who are in search of
satisfaction
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 can find it by taking their skills to a
next
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 level.
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