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In many countries, an increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In modern society, the issue of an increase in crime is widely discussed nowadays. There exists an opinion that
as a result
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 of the influence of violent content through mass media, PC and computer games
increase
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increases
 the amount of violence among the younger generation. I completely support
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 viewpoint, and
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 essay will give reasons for
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 a position.
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 of all Violent images broadcast on television and video games
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is
 more likely to affect young people than others because of a lack of knowledge and life experience. They tend to be curious and often want to experience what they think or what they see.
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, portraying violence in a
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realistic
 way can lead young people to real
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 and not to what they do when playing games.
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, over the past two years, on 17% the number of murders committed by high school students obsessed with killing scenes widely used in video games has increased in America.
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, tough actions broadcasting in computer games and films indirectly
form
a giver or sender
from
 criminals in their translational actions. Many studies indicate that watching
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 movies and hard computer games can lead to people becoming too aggressive. It seems that players and
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 fancier imitate their heroes and at some point, the loss of a sense of self-control can lead to the commission of a crime.
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, a massacre at a school in the United States in 2007 was committed by a student who admitted that his actions were motivated by violent
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 scenes. Summing all of the above, I am convinced that the influence of aggressive scenes in games and films on the young brain leaves a significant mark on their
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 actions and forms an aggressive attitude in society, which in turn increases crime rates.
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