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Some peole think young people are suitable for learning foreign languages some think adults are more suitable,Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Learning a
language
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 is an activity which is useful and takes considerable time. Some people opine that childhood stage is the best time to learn a
language
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, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that adults have more potential to gain new valuable skills,
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, in my views, adults can become a quick and fast learner.
Body paragraph 1
There is no doubt a young mind readily absorbs new information.
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 is because their cognitive skills develop at
this
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 age, while they have more ability to control over new
language
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.
For instance
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, 2-3 years, child
imitate
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imitates
 whatever they listen
,
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,
Thus
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exposure
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the exposure
 of offspring to exotic
language
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 should be done in those formative years of life they are might able to grasp two
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language
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languages
 simultaneously simply
listening
(law) a proceeding (usually by a court) where evidence is taken for the purpose of determining an issue of fact and reaching a decision based on that evidence
hearing
 others. What is more
,
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,
 children don't hesitate to ask whatever they don't understand.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, opponents of view think that a person can become a better dialect in
later years
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the later years
 of life.
Foremost reason
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The foremost reason
 is they are able to correlate their native terminology with a foreign terminology.
In
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On
By
 the way a new terms
,
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,
 concepts, and tenses they realize more quickly understood by comparing with that they already know.
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, youth have a strong motivation to memorize new
language
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, the intention is that they have more chances to acquire their
desire
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desired
 job when they are experts in more than one
language
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, In
this
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 globalization era, employers prefer multilingual staff
.
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.
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, can approach a phraseology with mature and realistic expectations.
Conclusion
To conclude
,
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,
 I reiterate my opinion that
grown-ups
a fully developed person from maturity onward
grownups
 are more adaptive in nature
.
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.
they
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They
 have potential and opportunity to communicate with other nation's people through technology as related to
minorty
a group of people who differ racially or politically from a larger group of which it is a part
minority
 ones who lose their interest more easily
.
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.

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