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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that is impossible for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own

#people #parents #children #part #group #activities #time
In the recent observations, children who take interest in spending their free time are most successful in their careers than who spend by themselves. Many schools and universities encourage scholars to build their personality and present themselves to the crowd.
Firstly
, interacting with all aged people and working together
help
Suggestion
helps
 kids develop excellent communication skills. It improves their interactive skills and learn to tackle in difficult situations.
For example
, schools implement
public relations course study
Suggestion
a public relations course study
 to spread awareness on improving talking to individuals.
Secondly
, few non-profit organizations conduct events and spread awareness of our surroundings
such
 as helping underprivileged, plastic usage, cleanliness, food assistance, and mental health. By participating in
such
 activities, our children will make a better tomorrow.
On the other hand
, some individuals who do not include in the
crowd mostly
Accept comma addition
crowd, mostly
 become introverted and try to develop by working on themselves.
Although
, they are academically succeeded, but lack in public speaking. Other studies prove that children who spend time on their own tend to suffer from mental health. They are
also
 diagnosed with low confidence, anxiety, poor presentation skills, and lots of fear.
As a result
, kids are attending therapy from a very young age.
Submitted by Madhav P on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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